Constructive Criticism

steelknight · Joined: 31 Aug 2004 Posts: 537 Location: The Moon

Just a few comments on dialog in KvZA.

'Kristy' from what I've seen has more of a classic comic book style with panels, storyline and dialog then Comet7 comics. For me, as a long time comic book reader, it's some times hard to follow the follow of some of the text and dialog on certain panels.

Take todays comic for instance. The first two panels are shots of the hallway and a bell but there are dialog ballons in them. Is this a narrator speaking or they are they exposition from the author?

In the 3rd and 4th panels, i'm not sure if she's speaking out loud or if that is an internal dialog. I'd assume it's internal but when you assume stuff that's when bad things happen.

My suggestions would either to different text coloring for narration/exposition and maybe different graphic styles for internal versus external conversations. Also off panel speaker text should maybe have different color/graphic. That way no explanation would be need for text coming off screen. That way it breaks up the dialog and makes it flow a little nicer. The first page of the new book was an excellent example of using a different graphic for internal conversation.

Now, don't take this as me putting anything down. I love the comic and styling. It's just a few Fridays I've found myself scratching my head wondering who is saying what and if the characters here stuff or not.
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king istrom · Joined: 06 Jul 2005 Posts: 2498

i dont

Xezial · Joined: 24 Sep 2005 Posts: 1899

king istrom · Joined: 06 Jul 2005 Posts: 2498

i ditto your ditto

Xezial · Joined: 24 Sep 2005 Posts: 1899

I can read it because I'm not a person with the IQ of a purple grape.
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king istrom · Joined: 06 Jul 2005 Posts: 2498

no flaming, be a good boy

Xezial · Joined: 24 Sep 2005 Posts: 1899

Sorry mate.

Sorry Steeldude.

But take your own advice Mr. Slapxezialonehundredandtwentythreetimes X_x;;;
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I'm french and I would play to final fantasy XII in american. However I do not know what patch I need to download, I already downloaded a patch but it freezed certain videos on my HDD. Could you please guide me through this problem.

king istrom · Joined: 06 Jul 2005 Posts: 2498

you said you wanted em!

James · Joined: 02 Aug 2004 Posts: 335

king istrom · Joined: 06 Jul 2005 Posts: 2498

Xezial · Joined: 24 Sep 2005 Posts: 1899

=0 Language James, this is meant to be PG. And yes I/we will try to do something about it X_x;;;
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I'm french and I would play to final fantasy XII in american. However I do not know what patch I need to download, I already downloaded a patch but it freezed certain videos on my HDD. Could you please guide me through this problem.

king istrom · Joined: 06 Jul 2005 Posts: 2498

*hint* try *hint*

Xezial · Joined: 24 Sep 2005 Posts: 1899

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I'm french and I would play to final fantasy XII in american. However I do not know what patch I need to download, I already downloaded a patch but it freezed certain videos on my HDD. Could you please guide me through this problem.

king istrom · Joined: 06 Jul 2005 Posts: 2498

rolly eyes! Rolling Eyes

Xezial · Joined: 24 Sep 2005 Posts: 1899

istrom, please keep down with the spamming, thank you. So anyways. I think it is easy to read if look at the pictures. If they seem in order, then you're alright. If Kristy suddenly goes flying after punching a zombie in the nads....back to the start. like monopoly ^-^.
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I'm french and I would play to final fantasy XII in american. However I do not know what patch I need to download, I already downloaded a patch but it freezed certain videos on my HDD. Could you please guide me through this problem.